not so free anymore

Posted by on Feb 3, 2010 in 2010, Choken Word, psychology, revelation, unemployment

The stream flows over you.
Cutting through rock and granite.
Carving mental pictures in it.
Shaping your physical and mental view.

What is your cause?
What will make you stop and pause?
Is it homelessness or cancer research?
Is it peace or educational solutions reached?

What truly tickles your fancy?
What would wake you from your fantasy?
Is there a cause that you believe in?
An inequality you could help make even.

Follow your passions they all say.
Only then will you find your way.
Only then will you be able to pay your bills.
Only then will you find the will.

Submit to a higher power and the water’s flow
that will direct your path and grow.
But what if this is not true?
What if this is all a distorted view?

What if you never find your passion?
What if you were not sent here for a mission?
Does that not mean you deserve the same?
Are we all put here to find fame?

Or are we all part of a collective decision?
Free will just a disguise to continue division.
All this I ask as I try and find my new path.
Many questions unanswered in my present and past.

The future holds the answers for which I seek.
I will know more each day and week.
For I am open to the cause I have sought.
But I am about done with the battles I have fought.

Ready to let the stream just take me.
Wherever it leads me I will soon see.
I will keep my head above water and continue to float.
Let the waters take me out to the sea in my life boat.

Hopefully the waters will not be too strong.
Hopefully my decisions I make are not too wrong.
For I don’t feel my free will is so free anymore.
But I am still looking forward to the adventure in store.

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  1. Center'd in JAX
    February 3, 2010

    News: Globatron: not so free anymore http://bit.ly/a20hM2 #jacksonville

  2. Akbar Lightning
    February 4, 2010

    this is great, i’m really feelin this one…it’s vulnerable, honest, and appeals to my own sense of self these days…good stuff.

    akbar

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  3. Liabach
    February 4, 2010

    Rhetorical questions make for poor
    poetry. A lovely imitation of
    an imitation of something someone
    dead now, might once have said
    as a joke.

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  4. Akbar Lightning
    February 4, 2010

    yo liabach, ante up, show us what you can come up with!

    don’t criticize if you can’t do better, that’s what i always say….yeah, i always say that…like you know, i’ll say it again…

    don’t criticize if you can’t hit the spot, the g-spot, as in globatron.

    don’t you think one ought to point to examples of excellence?

    that’s not rhetorical…or is it, is it any good?

    show us something original, and we’ll get down on our knees and worship you Liabach, because that would be divine…it is certainly not original on the internet to post a mean-spirited comment.

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  5. globatron
    February 4, 2010

    I would love to know who I was imitating because I was speaking specifically to current experiences in my life.

    Maybe I’m imitating myself from an alternate universe or reality? That could be an interesting answer to this question but since I’m sure no one knows if that is even possible I doubt that would be the answer.

    Being a complete outsider of poetry I don’t have the knowledge to imitate others that I am aware of. It is honestly sort of an honor to hear someone thinks I do. Thank you.

    But on a different level, aren’t we all imitating? This poem questions the existence of free will. If all my decisions are part of a plan made by a higher power (be it God or nature) how can anything be original? Is free will an illusion to create division among us? Is that division natural? Is originality an illusion?

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  6. Globatron.org
    February 5, 2010

    not so free anymore | an unoriginal poem about free will and #unemployment #in | http://bit.ly/dvlzjr

  7. Globatron.org
    February 10, 2010

    not so free anymore | an unoriginal poem about free will and #unemployment | http://bit.ly/dvlzjr

  8. Kevin Radford
    February 10, 2010

    RT @Globatron: not so free anymore | an unoriginal poem about free will and #unemployment | http://bit.ly/dvlzjr

  9. Liabach
    February 16, 2010

    And the rhetorics keep coming.

    Art by its nature requires fanaticism.
    Anything that is put
    into the public sphere should be good enough
    for the public sphere and therefore able
    to weather the slings and arrows of the
    public until the time comes for it to be replaced.

    We see you as static, Our idea of Art
    is better than yours.
    Artistic Imperialism.

    As for imitation: certainly we must point out to the
    artist who paints landscapes exclusively that landscapes
    have been painted prior and often better. Lack of
    knowledge on a subject does not excuse poor preformance
    when presented in the public sphere, nor does sincerity.

    Sincerity is a terrible mask, as it requires such little
    effort to maintain and no thirst for truth.

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  10. Akbar Lightning
    February 16, 2010

    well liabach,

    again, please point to those to whom you are referencing, if you indeed would like to make an argument, rather than simply being hurtful to someone attempting to express themselves.

    of course, i am rooting for the underdogs in this fight.

    i’m taking sincerity over crazy disorganized ironic statements that do not uplift, that drip with a desire to hurt.

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